Sorry I missed this. On a plane now, but I'll get back to you on it shortly.

Hey, glad you hadn't given up on this.

Here we go again . . .

Got around to reviewing these one at a time.

Activist special doesn't have an appropriate option for when listener understands cause, but doesn't care (too wrapped up in their own shit, for example).

I'm okay with that. I want the Activist to polarize people. Nobody walks away from them feeling indifferent.

Supply and favor confuse me a bit.  Are some playbooks supposed to only use one, others the other, and some both?  For example, the activist starts with only supply, but their mechanical gain advance is for favor.  Trying to work out what the intention is here.

Yep, I was trying to tease out some distinctions between what AW lumps together as barter. It's hard goods vs. influence. Most playbooks only work with one or the other, a few of the them (like the Businessman and the Activist) can dip into both. That's intentional.

Businessman - Someone to do your dirty work
Says 'one of your employees' then suggests 'Tarek *and* Misha'.  Or, surely, since there's be only one?  Or perhaps it's better phrased as 'some of your employees'?

Correct, it should be "or". Fixed.

CAG
No gear listed.

Yikes, not only is that a problem, it's a beast to fit anything more on that playbook. I found some space though. Fixed.

Captain - When I say jump
I suggest a rephrase so it isn't needed every time you give an order.  Perhaps add 'in a time of serious crisis'?  ("Bring me a coffee."  "Down with the Tyrant Captain!")

Good call. Fixed.

Commander - CIC
Move doesn't allow for changing circumstances.  If all you know is you're under attack, you enter CIC, get a weak hit, you need to spend it on the DRADIS before knowing what you need to do, then you can't do it.
1) Getting sensor readings from the DRADIS shouldn't be an option.  You always need to know what's going on, you should just be able to get readings.  If you want to keep it, I suggest adding the word 'detailed'.
2) It shouldn't be on entering, as that just means you have to keep exiting and entering the CIC during a crisis if you only get weak holds.  It should be 'When trying to organise the ship during a crisis' or something, so you can use it multiple times in a scene, with the risk of a malfunction providing balance.

1) Good call. Added "detailed"
2) I don't like the wording of "trying to organize", that isn't what a commander done, he or she takes control. But the point was a good one. I changed it to "When you are in the Combat Information Center and take control of a crisis".

Doctor, Engineer
No way to mechanically get favour or supply.  Deliberate?

Yep, these are potentially turtling characters, especially the engineer, that can just go off and play on his own without the other PCs. This is intentional to force them to interact and get them in play.

Engineer
Still has 2 ways of getting sharp +3

Removed the advancement and added in a "add Cylon tech to your workspace, and now you can work on Cylon technology there too."

Marine
7-9 option in boarding party still seems too harsh.  1-harm AP AND are disoriented AND acting under fire or leave something or take something.  I've had misses with better outcomes than that, especially since base AW says 'take something' can be harm.
1-harm AP OR disoriented and acting under fire OR leave something OR take something with seems fairer to me.

Yeah, that was supposed to be re-written as "or". Fixed

Tear gas grenade still mentions 'sharm', which still doesn't exist.

It was written wrong (3 s-harm), it should have just be S-harm, which is from the AW, it's stun harm. Knocks people out.

Advances give max sharp +3, not hard.

Fixed

Partisan
2 ways of getting cool +3

Removed the  +3 Cool advancement and added "lead the people: get an MU (detail) and Officer on Deck"

Protect your mark - still doesn't say 'as AP harm'.

Fixed

Pilot
You can actually get all of the pilot moves through advances.  I suggest otherwise.

Removed one of the "get a move" advancements and added "get a Viper MU (detail) and Officer on Deck"

President
Inter-colonial relations, surely?

Yes

Fleet reconstruction - malfunctions misspelled

Fixed

Well connected - Favours are valuable enough and +1 has a low enough chance of making a difference, that I can't see this move as being useful.  +2 before rolling or +1 after rolling would be good, though.  (Not saying both options for the move, but that one of them would make a good replacement.)

Agreed, I dislike retroactive explanations (they usually feel forced to me), increased to +2.

President can only get one new campaign?  Given that's their main thing, seems a bit harsh.

Added another advancement option to get a second.

7-9 result on Politicking is worse than base AW when doing more than 2 things.  (Base: 1 catastrophe if working more than 1.  AG: 1 success, rest catastrophes).  Deliberate?  Significant nerf of President if so.

I dislike the Operators 7-9 (it seems really close to the 10+), but agree my version is too harsh. Now 7-9 gives 1 success and (if more than one campaign run) 1 catastrophe.

No mentioned downside to not working obligation campaigns.

Added it at the bottom of obligation campaigns. "An unworked obligation campaign is an opportunity for the MC."

Visionary
2 ways of getting faith +3

Removed the +3 faith advancement and added "followers grant you insight, you can find answers from them as though you were in a Workshop"

Session End
No way to give Hx -1?

Nope

Cylon Projection
What does the 7-9 result actually *do*?

Huh, good questions, it isn't clear and I'm not sure how to make it clear. Going to think on that.

Also, where *is* the credits page in the files?  I saw the playtester list on your website, but your 'Credits given to contributors.' mentioned above implies that you have one inside the documents, and I just can't find it.

My worst mistake to date. I've added it to the introduction.

Hi Soylent. Thanks for the thorough check. I need to set up alerts on this post so I don't miss them in the future!

Looking at them now!

Hey Scott, thanks!

The sessions have been about two hours long, and yeah, I think we've covered a lot in both. Really good point about making sure there is something they miss. I'll ask more questions. We've already got a couple things (ammo, people, etc, but I'll make sure it's something they love all mighty). As for other exits, they've all be barricaded, collapsed or otherwise closed off already. Part of making it defensible was limiting access in the first place.

Yeah, you're right, 10+ should have some good results. I'll give them a question they can ask, or something like that.

Can't wait till they head out to Ash Heap.

Yeah, don't play that fucking game unless you have to.

Here's the AP of my last game, which starts with the Fronts I made (it was the 2nd session). Some of this was ripped off from Devon Apple's (Nuka Coil) and some from the sample front in the book (all three uses a Affliction as a disease/contamination vector).

I'd love any feedback on the Fronts (at the beginning of the post), and/or some of the places I think I fell down as an MC (at the end of the post).

http://www.seannittner.com/actual-play-knifesies/

Thanks,

Sean

At the gym I had an idea for a "24" like game of AW. Mixing two great games Wilderness of Mirrors and AW.

Some preliminary ideas. Stats are based on how you get awesome shit done: Force, Tech, Guile, Planning (maybe, always a kind of passive or retroactive stat), etc.

Hx rules - Support (costs some resource, perhaps Hx), and Betray (free, increases Hx).

Special becomes "When you complete a mission (operation, assignment, whatever), <this> happens. So each time something is finished, the mechanics ensure there is more fall out. Enemy operative captured. Awesome, now lets find out if he managed to leak information first? If there is a mole helping him get out? If someone else takes the credit? If there is other corruption this reveals? Various version of revealing future badness. Leader types get more trouble, where as follower types get more resources to make the Leader types miserable.

So, has this  been done already?

Sean

YES! Do this thing!

I wouldn't worry too much about mapping elements to AW stats.

Earth could be Hard, because it is blunt and strong, but it also could be Sharp because it is natural talent and awareness, but it also could be cool, because it it can endure blows.

But you know, a Samurai doesn't really operate on those wave lengths, I think samurai need moves like Fire -> Cut down your foes.  Air -> Speak in Court; Save Face, etc. And not worry about how they are analogous to the core AW stats at all. Some will be for sure, but don't let it hold you back.