Here you go: changelog covering everything that's changed from 06 June (my previous post here)
https://github.com/cromlyngames/EscapeTheDungeon/compare/master@%7B2017-06-06%7D...master

Notes on your notes
1) Elemental ooze startup bits need fixing. bugger. will do.
it will have:
jobs: Jnaitor, Plumber, Potter, Exterminator
demons: Resin; Rainfall; Writing; cheese; lawyers.

2)Basic moves - yeah. Still not 100% happy there, but I think dice need to hit the table to test them first.

3)If the MC isn't specifically called to "move against" an option, does that mean they can't do anything? Or is it a soft move like. Hmm... An example:
- for me, on a 10+ you succeed. No need for soft moves, the players should have moved the situation on themselves just by succeeding. If they end up looking at the GM afterwards, THEN a gm move triggers.
In your specific example, I would argue the GM should not make a move. It's a fucking awesome scene, the player succeeded on the roll and for the GM to anything but let Grimy blow the leg of Gerald is not being a fan of the characters. IMO.
I do get why you ask that. It feels like there is a beat missing in the rythm of the words in those moves. I'll need to think about the sentances used there for the flow to avoid that thought.

Ahh, alright.

This is all the lite rules say for the firebrand:

"The firebrand: If you don't make a stand, no one will.
When you do something small to subvert the powers that
be, advance the Suspicion clock by 1."

The thing you said they can do isn't there.

awesome, I'll take a look tonight

Thanks, that was incredibly helpful and crystallised some of my own doubts.

Everyone who is a keen Pbta player has asked for the 6- moves to be improved by loosening them, to allow the GM to move with the story. I trussed them up tight initially for the 'rule 4 - support the GM'. Basically I wanted someone with no prior experience of Pbta to not only be able, but be forced to Gm properly, with 6- moves driving fiction forward and snowballs.

That handcuffs people who feel comfortable, and stifles the fun of gming. I think it needs to go.

Ahh ok.

I think a chunk of it might be that I'm reading Savant as 'academic' while your meaning it as 'Tony Stark'.

I've got to admit though, personally, I really like "Savant: Pick one (Relic’s, gear, networks, artifacts)", that screams the theme at me, and after all, by the time I get to the character sheet I've read the previous three pages, so all those terms are activated in my brain :)

No way to edit. huh.

Yeah, fix those first two things up and maybe think about the third and gimme a new character sheet, I'll be happy to run this as a one shot on https://roleplayinggames.slack.com/

I added the first draft of the Dregs and the Magus playbooks.  Link at the top of the page.

Added a quick essay on Magic in this world. I've copied it below.



In the world of Escape the Dungeon, brave heroes explore the forgotten corners of the world, slaying creatures and collecting treasure.  They often try to kill the player characters for 'loot and experience'. How on earth does this work?

The world is steeped in magic. Magic is energy, throbbing potential for things to happen. It is unstable and tends to decay into something else quite quickly. Gold is the pure element that happens to be what a lot of magic turns into. This explains why town magic is so expensive, as the wizard is literally turning the gold back into raw magic to be infused into the spell. This process works in reverse too, and anywhere there is a large amount of magic you will have gold crystallizing out of the air. Since the dungeon largely runs on magic, you can see why heroes are attracted.

The second part of the surface dwellers' metaphysics of gold is that it can be transmuted into Levelup and back. A quantity of gold can be turned into new and terrible powers as the magic makes the target more than they were before. Traditionally, this type of personal growth up is achieved by killing, pushing things through the doorway from life to death. The bigger the door they need, the more Levelup you get. Levelup is the same thing as gold, gold is the same thing as magic, and magic changes the world.

The third part is the balance. The world has not ended in a runaway explosion of extinctions, tidal waves of gold boiling off into abstract gibbering shapes and fireballs. Magic is conserved. An increase of the amount of gold in the world must mean that the amount of free magic has decreased or that some things have died to keep the magic level the same. Or, local imbalance is corrected more directly.

In this world, large concentrations of magic create drama and gold. Large concentrations of gold leak magic, but also Levelup, normally in the form of tough, angry creatures. A rat that sleeps on a gold coin might be a giant rat next week. Sewers under rich cities are dangerous places. Owning a bank vault or being a tax collector is a scary proposition. Monsters don't carry gold, some of their life force crystallises into it when some idiot hero stabs them. Dragons sleep on piles of gold to absorb the magic they need to exist. Summoning a major spell can cause nearby gold to vanish, and if there's not enough gold, for life force to get sucked out of the wizard or someone nearby. A hero levelling up is drinking up magic that the dungeon needs to survive. Gold stolen and spent in the town is magic lost to the dungeon. A powerful monster is a significant investment of resources by the dungeon, but worth it if it stops some handsome thief crashing the local economy.