I went through this too while writing my Anansi skin, and I'm still not sure I have it quite perfect yet. Off the top of my head, I think Addictive and My Bitch, while thematically appropriate, cover the same territory...they're ways to get over on someone. In fact, The Devil Is A Winner does this too. Various combinations of those moves applied against a single target would, I think, create play that's not very suspenseful (and maybe not fun; it would depend I suppose).

Also, it seems fairly criminal that a Succubi skin doesn't have some special enhancement to the Turn Someone On move. Maybe I'm thinking inside the box, but I'd be trying to work that into the Succubi's default move somehow.

I have thoughts about Shapechanger as well, but I'm not sure I can articulate them just yet. I love gender-bending and I feel like there should be a move to accomodate this (at the same time, it'd be a shame to overlap thematic territory with what Jackson is doing). Maybe when the Succubus turns someone on, they may ask the player they're targeting who their character's idealized sexual partner is...and that's the form the succubus takes (and can take whenever they're appearing to that character)?

Just some thoughts. I like the skin a lot...the bitter jilted lover idea is great, and some of the moves really grab me. Just This Time is probably my favorite.

The Serpentine skin is free for download from the Buried Without Ceremony site.

I was able to acquire my Hollow skin a couple weeks ago from Joe for a donation to a charity of my choice. I snagged the Selkie by emailing Jackson Tegu (I offered him a bribe of sorts; I doubt that had anything with to do with him giving me the skin but I'm not sure it will be available forever and ever either). Jackson's website is here:

http://www.photographsoflightning.com/

Nice! Although technically not the first time, very cool to see something I did in French. I think you managed more brevity than I did! :)

Also, I need to get back to my French lessons.

That's kind of you. :)

I tweaked it a bit, based upon your suggestions. I subbed in a tried and true move trope for Shame On Me, and upon reflection, I think it makes more sense this way. I bumped the bonus on Death Can't Climb to bring it more in line with other moves that provide specific one-time bonuses. Still thinking about it though.

Thanks!

I dunno if they're weak especially or just simplistic when compared to the other moves (I kind of feel like I made all these moves too complicated). I think they'll see more play than some of the others because the fictional context in which they can come into play will be much broader. That may not matter, though, if the players get googly-eyed about the more exotic moves and don't take these ones. Personally, shame on me is my favorite of the moves, mostly because I want to play with the whole "who is most disappointed and why" mechanic.

Darkest Self: You have to prove your worth! Put yourself in mortal danger against something that, by all rights, you have no chance of defeating. Escape your Darkest Self when you defeat it, or your friends rescue you (or maybe restrain you and force you to see reason?).

(How many times did Xander go off and do this? A bunch as I recall.)

I like the Sex Move inversion.

I may just be missing it, but on what page does it mention that your mark xp on a miss?

I've searched the document a couple times and can't find that information either. As someone who's sort of late to the game (I've yet to have a chance to playtest, so never got in on the AG or any versions post redbook), I have FEELINGS about XP. :p

Also, not sure where the discussion on layout is going to happen, but the location of the move descriptions seemed inorganic to me as well.